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51274165
On the whole I'm very pleased looking at my finished piece. The clip is smooth and well rounded due to the editing and the music fits in great.I love the running scene (of David smith) the way the camera angles mixed with establishing shots and him running adds a great effect of a commotion or urgency. The only disappointing aspect of my piece is the volume of the speaking. This could be controlled if we had microphones, this may be an option for next time but it wasn't a great problem that couldn't even be fixed with more time to edit the video.
We intended to have my charter to be vanished or melted away when David clicks his fingers (using after effects) but once we'd filmed all the scenes we forgot to have a shot without my charter in the frame so We could not add that but I would have been a cool effect
Not had a chance to look at this yet, Jack, but I will post some comments over the weekend. Please make sure you get your title sequence materials up ASAP.
ReplyDelete0:00 - An effective opening shot, some good music. Good combination of long and close.
ReplyDelete0:15 - Good attempt at using a zoom here
0:20 - Good close-up, although slight break of the 180 degree rule; don't worry about it, because we'll be doing some stuff about this later.
0:28 - You're holding some of the shots a little longer than you should; be a little more judicious with your editing in future
0:38 - Some reasonably framing, although a little joggly in places. You might want to consider how to improve/ play with the sound to make it a little less grungy
0:57 - This is quite an effective sequence, although again would be better with a little more judicious editing to create the sense of pace you are going for - a few frames shaved off the beginning and end of each shot might help. A good range of shots have been used.
1:15 - You've got the continuity of going through the door pretty good
1:43 - I rather like this shot; quite effective in a "film noir" style
1:52 - I can see what you mean about the lighting, although this is not so much an issue. The sound is something you might want to think about for future films. Again, some rather effective framing
2:07 - Sound here is quite ropey as you identified. You might want to think a little bit about the mise-en-scene (it would have been more effective to mask off the background)
3:00 - Titles at the end are very good
This is a pretty good effort - you've used a range of shots and put together a pretty effective narrative. You've also identified where the issues were. You've demonstrated a good level of progression from your previous work - well done.